Okie-dokie, here it goes.

This page is very ambitious! Nice job on that dragon statue. The cast lighting on the rest of the statue from the glowing part on top looks pretty good! The kind of atmosphere you're going for is pretty spiffy, too. And the sky came out really well, the stars look great. ^^

This is a kind of difficult page for me to critique, because, um... I can barely see it. .-. True, I am using a laptop (college student ) but... It's not a good thing that you can only see it with an intensely backlit screen anyway... Chances are it's not going to fare well in print like this either (not necessarily even for comic print, but if you ever wanted to put this in an art portfolio of some sort).

In spite of that even, it's... very black. Too black. And yes, black would be the natural color assumption in a dark place, but the trouble is, 'dark' doesn't really mean 'black'. 'Specially not in art. It means... well, dark. In truth, 'black' isn't a color we see a lot. Unless you're somewhere where literally no light is getting to you, black doesn't really exist. There's just relative darkness. At night, even with no artificial lights, we have things like moonlight and starlight, and I'm sure Ambivia has a crapload of reflective lighting from that planet nearby...

Usually, to make things look like night, you would use much less of a color range. This typically means washing foreground elements in dark blue, or sometimes purple. (Real black and gray is sometimes used, but it can really deaden the picture, so unless that's what you're going for I don't recommend it.) I can't find any good photo refs (photos need good lighting, go figure :'D ) but for this I definitely suggest looking at some paintings for reference.

(While I'm on this subject, I've been meaning to bring up the fact that on all pages you have that 'WARNING: This looks better on light monitored computers'. Aside from the obvious, why do you leave that on for every page? There isn't any reason why it shouldn't like fine on every monitor...)

There are a few issues with where the lighting is cast... For example, the car in panel 3. The lighting just kind of starts and ends abruptly. Though that's sort of what is going on in the 'sphere' shading model, it that's not what would happen with something shaped like that car is. You wouldn't shade a cube the way you would shade a sphere, would you?

The cube and the car have flat planes. Flat planes have lighting pretty evenly disturbed over the top of them... For example, the hood of the car is fairly flat and the light is above it, so the light should fall over the whole dashboard, unless there's something stopping it. Light travels in straights lines... it never stops in a place abruptly, unless something is blocking it between the 'landing' and the source.

Oh, and there's the right headlight on the car in the same panel... For some reason, the light is there, but it's not relating to anything, and the light just abruptly stops. Yes, light travels in a straight line, but it also reflects. I see what you're going for with the beams of the headlights, but that's not really how it works... chances are the light is reflecting off of something else in the area (anything. Even particles in the air) and some of it is bound to reach the front of the car a bit.

Lastly, there's reflective surfaces. Things like the water in the fountain, and the metal on the car are going to be highly reflective, and catch bits of whatever lighting is in the area, provided a straight line could reach them from the source.

Yeah. Lighting... it's a lot to think about. Knowing your lighting does wonders for atmosphere though.

Again, very ambitious page, I'm pretty impressed. A lot people would probably just bs the whole thing. With some tweaking this could be quite a fantastic page.

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(The comment I left you might have been really, really long and typo-ridden. Sorry in advance. ; )

I think that the first and second panels in this page look really good; professional. xD I can see how you may not like the last panel; it does look slightly off on the stairs. However, Jenelle's expression makes me laugh because she doesn't seem the kind of person to give THAT particular look. xD But overall I give a good 4.99999999999999999999 stars. xD (out of 5)

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Why does Jenelle's nose in panel 7, ummm...stick out?
I have never seen it that round. It just doesn't seem right.

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